CAn you read this and just like gimmi ur opinion? plz and tank u!?
I stuck my face in my knees and stared at the ground under me. The sun rays lit up the whole court as it started to set. I smiled to myself at the beauty of the view. I’ve always had people telling me I was beautiful, but I would just tell them they needed to get out more and see some real beauty, and nature was the first thing on my list.
Bora Bora was second.
I kept staring at the ground, letting the memories of old trips roam through my head. It wasn’t long before the ground I was staring at was covered with a bunch of shoes. I looked up and noticed all the chicks from the other side of the court in front of me. Some just stared and chuckled while the one in front looked me up and down.
“Who the hell are you?” she placed a hand on her white exposed hip and glared at me. I didn’t answer her because I knew her type. With all the piercings on her body, he wouldn’t? her shirt was so small, I wouldn’t be surprised if she got it from the Baby department. Might as well take it off now, it looked like it was about rip off itself. She blew a pink bubble and twirled a jet black curl around her finger. Her eyes matched her hair, dark and pitiless. I would’ve called her good looking, but then I’d be lying. Maybe if she got rid of her clothes and the piercings.
“You hear me, b****?” And the attitude.
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when i saw your question, which was using poor grammar and spelling, i thought i would hate it. you totally surprised me with some decent writing. i loved the way you developed the main character. the only helpfull comment that i can see is to watch your verb tenses. you maintain a steady past tense use, but you threw in a few present tenses as well. i really hope you continue this and dont be afraid to send me more when you make it! good luck on the rest of your writing;)
wOw
Is this a made up story? Doesn’t sound real to me